Monday, 23 April 2012

100 Word Challenge - News Flash

I popped my head around Charlotte's door ....

"What's up Char? Not seen you all evening."

Charlotte was slumped over her desk. Her slender fingers tightly clawed around a newspaper.

"Oh, hey, hi. Sorry, I'm locked onto something at the moment. Catch up with you in five?"

I hesitated.

"Are you sure you're okay?"

Charlotte inhaled, sighed and turned towards me.

"Remember David? The guy I had that fling with two years a ago."

"Vaguely."

Charlotte looked at me in disbelief.

"He's dead. Threw himself onto the tracks."

"Shit. You're kidding?"

Charlotte gave me that look.

 "Chrissy I need time out. I'm exhausted. Shut the door behind you?"


I'm linking up with JB47's 100 Word Challenge. This week's prompt was ...

"I'm exhausted. Shut the door behind you."


37 comments:

  1. This is GREAT! I used to do these fairly regularly but never seem to have enough time to get that creative anymore. This might give me the oomph I need.

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    1. Ah thanks Polly. I just suddenly felt inspired last night.

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  2. Welcome to the 100WCGU. It is great to see you. You have let your reader's know that there is tension and distress there. Great writing.

    Can I be a bit picky? It is jfb57 and I don't like swearing. I do hope that won't put you off joining again. you clearly have a super talent that should be shared!

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    1. Thank you and oh heck! No more naughty words next time, I apologise, I didnt realise.

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    2. Hee hee! No harm done.
      I run a 100 Word Challenge for Children and sometimes they like to read what the grown ups are doing.

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  3. Very well written! I had to go back to see what that word was. Then I checked mine to make sure I hadn't erred too. ~Miriam

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    1. Thank you! Won't be making the same mistake next time. I got carried away in the dialogue.

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  4. A nice piece. You can feel the tension.

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  5. Friendships sometimes pick up on those pieces of us that others don't...history and concern are well conveyed...thanks for sharing. :)

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  6. Glad you've come to join us with the 100WC. I really enjoyed this - it had just the right amount of tension and emotion. Look forward to reading more of your writing in the future.

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    1. Thank you. I was a little nervous at first and then bit the bullet. Some of the challenges are pretty tricky!

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  7. I could sense the tension in the room, good piece!

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    1. Thank you! And for coming over and commenting.

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  8. Excellent piece. Love the way you built the tension.

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  9. I came looking for inspiration as I've not done the 100WCGU for ages. Great piece - very raw.

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    1. Ah, that's really sweet of you. Thank you.

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  10. Oh my what a shock! well done,a really good use of the prompt!

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    1. Thank you! I got all inspired the other evening ...

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  11. Charlotte still feels for him, I think ... great how you got some drama out of a really mundane prompt. But that's what Julia is hoping, she's not daft!

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    1. Yes, I think so too - I might have to continue this story!

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    2. PLEASE continue the story! I was hooked just on this first 100 words!

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  12. Great story! Very vivid. I love these 100-word stories that are mostly dialogue. They come so alive. Really enjoyed it!

    Jean Mishra... MoonLightened Way on Wordpress

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    1. Thank you! I am so glad that so much came across in so few words.

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  13. What a great piece. Loved it. I must do mine. x

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  14. Oh wow! A whole world and beyond in 100 words. I want more!

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    1. Thankyou. I just read yours - it was great. Planning to let this one run ...

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  15. Very good, you created a great atmosphere with this piece. Look forward to reading more from you.

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    1. Thank you for your lovely comment.

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  16. Great writing. (Could not help but be left thinking..I hope this is 100% fiction. Would be awful to experience that situation in real life.)
    Did you find it difficult to stick to 100 words? I think I would find it very hard!

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    1. Hello! Thank you! To reassure you it was 100% fiction. Yes, I had to edit it down. It was tricky striking the balance.

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  17. A lot of story in just 100 words.
    I really enjoyed it.

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