Tuesday, 8 May 2012

100 Word Challenge - The Undead

"What? Your fault?" I intoned aghast.

"I liked him. I did." Charlotte began. "He was just so intense. He kept calling. He ..."

Charlotte's thoughts trailed off. 

Without a word she disappeared into her room.

She returned pressing the newspaper into my hand.

The story reported a suspected suicide. It was grimly offset by an editorial at the bottom; an advertisement for an exhibit of prehistoric relics. The caption read The Undead.

"I'm going to phone David's brother."

I looked up at Charlotte's troubled expression.

"Why?" I asked.

"I have to go to the funeral. To make amends. Come with me Chrissy?"


I'm linking up with JB47's 100 Word Challenge. This week's prompt was ... this picture;

Old Bones



32 comments:

  1. I really like this interpretation of the prompt. I love the juxtaposition in the newspaper of the obituary with the exhibit - it says so much with so little.

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    1. Thank you .... its great that you the reader can interpret in your own way, and see things I don't.

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  2. ooh creepy, I love it. You build some real tension there. So much told in so few words. Well done. x

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    1. Thank you .. I'm enjoying writing this!

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  3. i agree with susan- creepy in so few words! good work! x

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    1. Thank you. Interesting how everyone is finding it creepy!

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  4. Am loving this OMIAM! Hooked, Hooked, Hooked! Looking forward to next weeks installment!

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    1. Thank you! Lets see what the prompt is - this week was tricky!

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  5. This is very good. Loved the way you managed to get the old bones in. Very clever.

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    1. Thank you! Yes, it was tricky and had to fit in naturally aswell.

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  6. Amends for what, I wonder …

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    1. Yes, quite! We shall see how it unfolds!

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  7. Someone needs to tell her that you don't have to go out with someone in case they commit suicide if you don't. Poor, mixed-up, silly girl.

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    1. I am really loving your comments on these short stories ... I am going to continue with it just to wind you up some more with her character :o).

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  8. Oh dear, she picked a strange one didn't she? Interesting use of the prompt which leaves the reader wondering.

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    1. Thank you. Yes, indeed. More to come depending on the prompt!

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  9. Clever way to get the prompt in - adds to the creepiness of the tale being told. Looking forward to seeing what happens next.

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    1. Thank you. Yes, it was tricky! I am enjoying letting the prompts lead the story ...

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  10. Great story from a tricky prompt - I loved this and found it quite chilling too. This would make a great basis for a longer story. Polly

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    1. Thank you Polly! The challenge was getting the prompt to fit in naturally. I'm going to continue this story - see where the prompts take me!

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  11. Oh my goodness! You need to somehow collate all of these 100 word prompts into a novel! Note to self: do not read those posts before going to sleep... They are spooky!

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    1. I would like maybe, to write a novel one day, but its a serious undertaking. Didn't mean to spook you out! :o).

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  12. This is a really creative use of the prompt, weaving it into a different story. You did this seamlessly, and at the same time gave me characters I can care about.

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    1. That was a lovely comment. Thank you. Glad you liked it.

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  13. Very creative use of the prompt. Love it.

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  14. Nicely done. I think guilt might be the winner here.

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  15. DancingInTheRain13 May 2012 21:05

    Unlike others, I didn't find it at all creepy - maybe they were referring to the title. I was pleased to immediately recognise last week's story and even more pleased to learn that she isn't actually a murderer - she just feels like one (poor thing). Excellent inclusion of the prompt - clever, clever, clever. Well done!

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    1. Thank you for such a lovely comment. I am glad you are enjoying it! Made my day.

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  16. Wow, so impressed with the extra challenge of continuing from the previous week's prompt. I really liked the way you worked the ball of bones into the story, very creative!

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    1. Thank you very much for your kind comment. I'm trying to continue the story and see where the prompts take me!

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