Tuesday, 24 July 2012

100 Word Challenge - Forbidden Treasure

The attache case lay on the table.

David stared at the clasps. It was sealed like a clam guarding a black pearl. Forbidden treasure, he already knew its contents.

The Woman sat motionless on the other side. David felt sweat collecting on his brow. He clenched both his fists into compact grenades.

The line was drawn. There was no going back.

"David, the details of the trade are inside," The Woman instructed, "We'll wire you the cash. You know the fund. You get this wrong, you lose. We'll be watching."

David grabbed the case and left.

The future felt starved of oxygen.

He was in too deep.


I'm linking up with JB47's 100 Word Challenge. This week's prompt was ... the line was drawn ...

This is part of a wider story. You can read the other instalments in the series here.



26 comments:

  1. Intriguing.... Love the description of the case like a clam!

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  2. Oo, very intriguing. Super description- had a chill when he left the room. This story has legs...

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    1. Thank you! Its been running for a few weeks now .... :o).

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  3. Great piece. Love the tension of the piece and also his resignation to his fate at the end ' the future felt starved of oxygen'. Will he do it? Why does he need to do it? Why doesn't he just walk away? Questions..questions!

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    1. Thankyou ... and some good questions to ask, some of those hadn't occured to me. I guess just plain greed.

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  4. ooh i wonder what he has to do? more plz! :D x

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  5. Good stuff as ever. Starting to identify with him...

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    1. Thank you. Now that's interesting ...

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  6. In way over his head, hmmm? I wonder if he'll manage to stay alive and out of jail. Well written.

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    1. Thank you. He's in a whole heap of trouble!

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  7. Ooh, the intrigue! I want to know how he got himself into this mess.

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    1. Good question. I hadn't really thought about that yet, wanted to leave it to the reader's imagination.

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  8. I have to know more! This really gripped me from the start. You threw your reader right into the deep end and left them there. I do hope there is a follow- up instalment!

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    1. Thank you. You will, and I shall!

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  9. Ooh, sounds ominous. Well done!

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  10. Great intrigue and tension. the clam guarding the black pearl, the oxygen starved future. perfect imagery. well done. :)

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    1. Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it ... more to come!

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  11. Wow both the clam and the grenades, excellent work. A very strong story line!

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    1. Thank you ... I'm going to see if I can continue it.

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  12. All it takes is one bad deal to get in deep.
    This one is quite interesting and I too would like to see this storyline continue. Well done!

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    1. Thank you ... I hope to continue and finish it, its been going on for a fair few weeks, soon.

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