Tuesday, 17 July 2012

100 Word Challenge - Grief

"Don't shout at me Chrissy. You just don't understand."

"Look I'm sorry Char."

Charlotte began to cry. Sunlight traced the tears flowing down her anguished face. Each heavy drop left a path as straight as a Roman road. They began falling with sudden intensity like the undifferentiated raindrops of a cloud burst. The rain turned the road into a river; Charlotte's cheeks were awash with grief.

Without another breath I moved to encase my friend in my arms.

"I'm sorry." I whispered.

"Why did you ..." Charlotte sobbed "call him ... duplicitous?"

"I dunno. Just spur of the moment."

I'd lied but truth, for now, could sail on the horizon.


I'm linking up with JB47's 100 Word Challenge. This week's prompt was ...the rain turned the road into a river...

This is part of a wider story. You can read the other instalments in the series here.



30 comments:

  1. Clever use of the line. And I love truth sailing on the horizon.

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    1. Thank you. A rare moment of inspiration!

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  2. It's the word duplicitous that has got me wondering...
    Agree with Middle aged Matron ' truth sailing on the horizon' is great.

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    1. Thank you ... all will be revealed if I don't get too lost in the story!

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  3. Ditto above and also the 'undifferentiated raindrops', lovely!

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    1. Thank you. It can take me a while to think up these descriptions.

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  4. you do turn the phrases very well! it seems like part of a larger story...well done. :)

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    1. Thank you! ... yes, it is part of a larger story.

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  5. Things seem to be looking up for their relationship, but there's still that mystery hanging in the air.

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    1. It is at the moment ... but we shall see! Yes, there's quite a few loose ends to tie up.

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  6. I loved this, such a large story in so few words and beautifully phrased.

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    1. Thank you. Very glad you like the way it was written!

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  7. I like the use of the line, a different kind of road and a different kind of river. The story sounds sad and intriguing.

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    1. Thank you ... its part of a wider story which I hope top complete soon depending upon the prompts!

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  8. Very clever and a lovely piece x

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  9. Lovely use of language. And a beautiful solution for the river.

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    1. Thank you. I tried my best to think out of the box!

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  10. Fabulous descriptive ending, I can just see "truth sailing on the horizon" - I wonder when we'll pick truth up again!?

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    1. Thank you! That was a rare moment of inspiration ... the truth will out!

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  11. Am loving this story! The plot is thickening...

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    1. It is ... But I hope I can do justice to it by tying up the loose ends well ... there are alot to tie up!

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  12. What beautiful imagery!! Love it!!

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  13. Quite emotional and hard-hitting use of the challenge. Well done!

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    1. Thank you ... I love that turn of phrase; hard hitting!

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  14. really loving this 100 word challenge :)

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  15. A different figurative use for the prompt. Great scene, her friends in a quandry. He's still a cheat though ;]

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