Monday, 26 November 2012

100 Word Challenge - Trembling

"Chrissy," Charlotte half wailed, "we're going to be late."

"I'm doing my best." Stupid car. Stupid me.

The engine had finally coughed into shape after nearly twenty attempts. Now we were late for David's funeral.

"Left turn, Chrissy, left turn."

I took a sharp turn down a slice of solemn suburbia, ahead the crematorium.

Limp coats were already entering the old stone building.

We shuffled in at the rear, Charlotte dressed in polite black, I, an indifferent grey.

On a plinth lay the casket.

Charlotte's hands trembled, her face bloodless.

"I'm gonna throw up Chrissy."

Hand over mouth, she bolted outside.


I'm linking up with JB47's 100 Word Challenge. This week's prompt was... Grey ...


This is part of a wider story. You can read the other instalments in the series here.



29 comments:

  1. It's a strange time of year for me now -- this is getting difficult for me to read for personal reasons. I'm still curious about how it all turns out, though.

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    1. Thank you for your honest comment - I totally understand where you are coming from - I hope to finish this before Xmas - and if you want to, come back to it another time :o).

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    2. Ps. Sorry to hear this isn't a good time of year for you.

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  2. Love this piece - some great descriptions here. Solemn suburbia and limp coats - fabulous. Now I'm wondering if one of them is pregnant?

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    1. Thank you! This was a fun one to write - nearly at the finish line now!

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  3. 'Polite black' 'indifferent grey' - good description!

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    1. Thank you very much - glad you liked it!

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  4. Wow, you sure do fit a lot in 100 words! I really got a sense of the story. Have to come back for more now!

    xx Jazzy

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    1. Thank you! Glad you liked it - read from the beginning if you like :o). X.

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  5. Your story is compelling, Love your imagination, X

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  6. great fun macabre-humor piece!@

    Randy

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  7. I love reading your 100 word challenges but I'm always desperate to know MORE! xx

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    1. Thank you ... this story should conclude by the time your bundle of joy arrives! X.

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  8. I'm hoping then that when its finished you put it in one piece because I've missed several weeks and i'd like to read it flowing!

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    1. That would be a good thing to do - I've tried to keep the pieces as flowing as possible but it can be quite challenging with only 100 words at my disposal. All the pieces can be found in my 'writing' section - if you fancy a read. :o)

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  9. I never before knew what a plinth was. Nice treatment ... What's going to happen next???

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  10. Love the 'indifferent grey'. I'd like to see it in its entirety at the end too!

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    1. Thank you ... and so would I!!! I haven't read the whole thing for ages!

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  11. What a fab story, love to read more x

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  12. Just catching-up. Can feel that is coming to some kind of conclusion... the story has been intriguing and surprising throughout. You are good at this x

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    1. Thank you! Nearly at the finish line X.

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  13. I, too, am struck by "indifferent grey."

    Is she unmoved by this death?

    JzB

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