Monday, 7 January 2013

100 Word Challenge - Slapped

I found Charlotte doubled over next to a grave coating humiliated snowdrops in sticky bile, thick yellow drool hanging from her pale bottom lip.

"Char, what is it? You okay?"

She placed both hands on her stomach, cautiously straightening her back.

"Chrissy, got a tissue?"

"Here. Have this."

 A chilly gust slapped my cheek as Charlotte wiped her mouth.

"Chrissy, I can't keep it in any longer, I have to go to the police."

"WHAT? You said you'd do WHAT?"

"Found it so hard to tell you Chrissy."

"Tell me what?"

"I WAS THERE when he threw himself on the tracks."

A chilly gust smacked my other cheek.


I'm linking up with JB47's 100 Word Challenge. This week's prompt was... You said you'd do WHAT? ...


This is part of a wider story. You can read the other instalments in the series here.



25 comments:

  1. I love it how you string your story together from these prompts. Nothing short of ingenius / genius whichever way you look at it!

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  2. Oh no!! She kept it in a really long time!

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    1. I know .... but there's more to come!

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  3. This has such tension roght the way through, keeping your reader guessing. If they hadn't read the other installments, this stands well on it's own. Great writing and thank you for following the blog!

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    1. Thank you very much! I really enjoy your prompts!

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  4. I agree. It stands well on its own. Always interesting to read the different takes on the prompt each time.

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  5. Oooh...that Chrissy is a dark horse. She'll be saying he didn't jump next! Love the serialisation of this story against the prompts. Always v. clever. Do you know how it's going to end or are you letting the prompts guide you?

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    1. I'm really glad you wrote that comment - I accidentally wrote this with the names the wrong way round - I must have been very tired - all amended!!!! I know how it's going to end but let the prompts take me there :o).

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    2. No. I'm the tired one - I think I'm confused! Anyway, glad to have helped (or not as the case may be). I need to go back and reread. x

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  6. Ooh! Will have to have a look back and see what happened before :)

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  7. Cleverly done; I am always impressed when the prompts are used for a series of pieces.

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  8. Great first sentence! Hooked me straight in!

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    1. Thank you! I guess that's the effect you want!

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  9. Oh, I really have to catch up on your story!it really does stand up on it's own. Very clever, well done.

    xx Jazzy

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    1. Thank you Jazzy - let me know what you think of the rest! X.

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  10. Ooh, you are so clever linking them all together! x

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  11. Very cleverly done, love how they link together x

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