Monday, 1 April 2013

100 Word Challenge - Fear

...A woman in a purple two piece. Jet hair. A stringy man next to her. Pensive, serious looking.

Both sat at the back, their robotic eyes scanning the congregation.

"David was my brother..."

Their eyes closed in on us. I turned away, feeling laser like strokes up and down my spine.

Something wasn't right.

"Char," I whispered in her ear."Have you clocked those two at the back?"

Charlotte turned. Then looked back abruptly, tears replaced by fear.

"He had years ahead of him, taken far too soon..."  

"What's the matter? What's up?"

"I don't believe it Chrissy, it's the guy who pushed David."


I'm linking up with JB47's 100 Word Challenge. This week's prompt was... I don't believe it...


This is part of a wider story. You can read the other instalments in the series here.



24 comments:

  1. LOVE IT!!! You can't stop there!....

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    1. THANK YOU! Don't worry - I won't! :o).

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  2. Ooo, goosebumps! When I get a few minutes peace and quiet, I'm going to go back through all of these. Love them!

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    1. Oh, brilliant - I think I might have to too! Thank you!

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  3. Gripping- er and gripping - er. So clever. Can't wait for the next bit!

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    1. That made me laugh! Nearly at the finish line now!

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  4. Superb cliff-hanger! You built the suspense very expertly!

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  5. That was very good actually - totally unexpected,and what's he doing there.Her reactionis interesting too.Very lively.

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    1. Thank you! Glad you enjoyed it :o).

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  6. Ohhhhhhhh Sarah, can you increase it to 200 words this week! Then maybe get the full novel rushed out :) Keeping me in suspenders until next week tsk tsk.

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    1. Ha ha ha - thank you. I honestly didn't think this story would take so long to do!

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  7. LOVE IT. Expertly done (as always). Bet you were pleased when you saw that prompt!

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    1. THANK YOU! And yes, that prompt was a dream - it just had to be done!

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  8. Ooo oooo! I need to read more! Really good - I could never do one of these 100 words things justice x

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    1. Cheers Annie! Stay tuned for next week :o). X.

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  9. URG! how awful would that be! I just might have to read the whole thing... nice take on the prompt, as always!

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  10. Ooh, brilliant! Prickles on the back of my neck!

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    1. Thank you - nearly at the finish line now!

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