Tuesday, 17 July 2012

100 Word Challenge - Grief

"Don't shout at me Chrissy. You just don't understand."

"Look I'm sorry Char."

Charlotte began to cry. Sunlight traced the tears flowing down her anguished face. Each heavy drop left a path as straight as a Roman road. They began falling with sudden intensity like the undifferentiated raindrops of a cloud burst. The rain turned the road into a river; Charlotte's cheeks were awash with grief.

Without another breath I moved to encase my friend in my arms.

"I'm sorry." I whispered.

"Why did you ..." Charlotte sobbed "call him ... duplicitous?"

"I dunno. Just spur of the moment."

I'd lied but truth, for now, could sail on the horizon.


I'm linking up with JB47's 100 Word Challenge. This week's prompt was ...the rain turned the road into a river...

This is part of a wider story. You can read the other instalments in the series here.



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29 comments:

  1. Adventures of a Middle-aged Matron17 July 2012 at 14:50

    Clever use of the line. And I love truth sailing on the horizon.

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    1. Older Mum18 July 2012 at 08:22

      Thank you. A rare moment of inspiration!

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  2. Mummy Plum17 July 2012 at 15:49

    It's the word duplicitous that has got me wondering...
    Agree with Middle aged Matron ' truth sailing on the horizon' is great.

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    1. Older Mum18 July 2012 at 08:23

      Thank you ... all will be revealed if I don't get too lost in the story!

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  3. Anonymous17 July 2012 at 20:38

    Ditto above and also the 'undifferentiated raindrops', lovely!

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    1. Older Mum18 July 2012 at 08:25

      Thank you. It can take me a while to think up these descriptions.

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  4. Anonymous17 July 2012 at 21:41

    you do turn the phrases very well! it seems like part of a larger story...well done. :)

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    1. Older Mum18 July 2012 at 08:26

      Thank you! ... yes, it is part of a larger story.

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  5. SparksInShadow17 July 2012 at 23:52

    Things seem to be looking up for their relationship, but there's still that mystery hanging in the air.

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    1. Older Mum18 July 2012 at 08:26

      It is at the moment ... but we shall see! Yes, there's quite a few loose ends to tie up.

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  6. Sarah Miles18 July 2012 at 09:12

    I loved this, such a large story in so few words and beautifully phrased.

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    1. Older Mum18 July 2012 at 17:47

      Thank you. Very glad you like the way it was written!

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  7. Lisa18 July 2012 at 18:37

    I like the use of the line, a different kind of road and a different kind of river. The story sounds sad and intriguing.

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    1. Older Mum19 July 2012 at 11:24

      Thank you ... its part of a wider story which I hope top complete soon depending upon the prompts!

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  8. Susan Mann19 July 2012 at 16:59

    Very clever and a lovely piece x

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  9. Anonymous19 July 2012 at 18:52

    Lovely use of language. And a beautiful solution for the river.

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    1. Older Mum20 July 2012 at 11:59

      Thank you. I tried my best to think out of the box!

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  10. Catherine-Jayne19 July 2012 at 23:12

    Fabulous descriptive ending, I can just see "truth sailing on the horizon" - I wonder when we'll pick truth up again!?

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    1. Older Mum20 July 2012 at 12:05

      Thank you! That was a rare moment of inspiration ... the truth will out!

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  11. Lynsey Summers20 July 2012 at 16:20

    Am loving this story! The plot is thickening...

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    1. Older Mum20 July 2012 at 17:13

      It is ... But I hope I can do justice to it by tying up the loose ends well ... there are alot to tie up!

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  12. taochild21 July 2012 at 00:50

    What beautiful imagery!! Love it!!

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  13. Anonymous22 July 2012 at 19:15

    Quite emotional and hard-hitting use of the challenge. Well done!

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    1. Older Mum23 July 2012 at 14:12

      Thank you ... I love that turn of phrase; hard hitting!

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  14. sarah23 July 2012 at 06:41

    really loving this 100 word challenge :)

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  15. ventahl24 July 2012 at 15:00

    A different figurative use for the prompt. Great scene, her friends in a quandry. He's still a cheat though ;]

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