Monday, 1 April 2013

100 Word Challenge - Fear

...A woman in a purple two piece. Jet hair. A stringy man next to her. Pensive, serious looking.

Both sat at the back, their robotic eyes scanning the congregation.

"David was my brother..."

 Their eyes closed in on us. I turned away, feeling laser like strokes up and down my spine.

Something wasn't right.

"Char," I whispered in her ear."Have you clocked those two at the back?"

Charlotte turned. Then looked back abruptly, tears replaced by fear.

"He had years ahead of him, taken far too soon..."  

"What's the matter? What's up?"

"I don't believe it Chrissy, it's the guy who pushed David."


I'm linking up with JB47's 100 Word Challenge. This week's prompt was... I don't believe it...
This is part of a wider story. You can read the other instalments in the series here.



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24 comments:

  1. Aisha from Expatlog1 April 2013 at 20:52

    LOVE IT!!! You can't stop there!....

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  2. farfromhomemama1 April 2013 at 21:11

    Ooo, goosebumps! When I get a few minutes peace and quiet, I'm going to go back through all of these. Love them!

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    1. Older Mum1 April 2013 at 21:15

      Oh, brilliant - I think I might have to too! Thank you!

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  3. Older Single Mum2 April 2013 at 09:28

    Gripping- er and gripping - er. So clever. Can't wait for the next bit!

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    1. Older Mum2 April 2013 at 13:25

      That made me laugh! Nearly at the finish line now!

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  4. Anonymous2 April 2013 at 13:19

    Superb cliff-hanger! You built the suspense very expertly!

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  5. PirateGunn2 April 2013 at 20:26

    That was very good actually - totally unexpected,and what's he doing there.Her reactionis interesting too.Very lively.

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  6. Nichola Fabfortymum2 April 2013 at 22:43

    Ohhhhhhhh Sarah, can you increase it to 200 words this week! Then maybe get the full novel rushed out :) Keeping me in suspenders until next week tsk tsk.

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    1. Older Mum3 April 2013 at 09:06

      Ha ha ha - thank you. I honestly didn't think this story would take so long to do!

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  7. Mummy Plum2 April 2013 at 23:01

    LOVE IT. Expertly done (as always). Bet you were pleased when you saw that prompt!

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    1. Older Mum3 April 2013 at 09:11

      THANK YOU! And yes, that prompt was a dream - it just had to be done!

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  8. Mammasaurus4 April 2013 at 14:02

    Ooo oooo! I need to read more! Really good - I could never do one of these 100 words things justice x

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    1. Older Mum4 April 2013 at 15:43

      Cheers Annie! Stay tuned for next week :o). X.

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  9. Anonymous4 April 2013 at 16:04

    URG! how awful would that be! I just might have to read the whole thing... nice take on the prompt, as always!

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  10. Alicia Audrey4 April 2013 at 17:19

    Oh, wow! Nice one!

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  11. Sarah Miles4 April 2013 at 20:54

    Ooh, brilliant! Prickles on the back of my neck!

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    1. Older Mum5 April 2013 at 08:49

      Thank you - nearly at the finish line now!

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  12. Anonymous5 April 2013 at 19:03

    ooooh spine tingling brill! :)

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