"I liked him. I did." Charlotte began. "He was just so intense. He kept calling. He ..."
Charlotte's thoughts trailed off.
Without a word she disappeared into her room.
She returned pressing the newspaper into my hand.
The story reported a suspected suicide. It was grimly offset by an editorial at the bottom; an advertisement for an exhibit of prehistoric relics. The caption read The Undead.
"I'm going to phone David's brother."
I looked up at Charlotte's troubled expression.
"Why?" I asked.
"I have to go to the funeral. To make amends. Come with me Chrissy?"
I'm linking up with JB47's 100 Word Challenge. This week's prompt was ... this picture;
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| Old Bones |
I really like this interpretation of the prompt. I love the juxtaposition in the newspaper of the obituary with the exhibit - it says so much with so little.
ReplyDeleteThank you .... its great that you the reader can interpret in your own way, and see things I don't.
Deleteooh creepy, I love it. You build some real tension there. So much told in so few words. Well done. x
ReplyDeleteThank you .. I'm enjoying writing this!
Deletei agree with susan- creepy in so few words! good work! x
ReplyDeleteThank you. Interesting how everyone is finding it creepy!
DeleteAm loving this OMIAM! Hooked, Hooked, Hooked! Looking forward to next weeks installment!
ReplyDeleteThank you! Lets see what the prompt is - this week was tricky!
DeleteThis is very good. Loved the way you managed to get the old bones in. Very clever.
ReplyDeleteThank you! Yes, it was tricky and had to fit in naturally aswell.
DeleteAmends for what, I wonder …
ReplyDeleteYes, quite! We shall see how it unfolds!
DeleteSomeone needs to tell her that you don't have to go out with someone in case they commit suicide if you don't. Poor, mixed-up, silly girl.
ReplyDeleteI am really loving your comments on these short stories ... I am going to continue with it just to wind you up some more with her character :o).
DeleteOh dear, she picked a strange one didn't she? Interesting use of the prompt which leaves the reader wondering.
ReplyDeleteThank you. Yes, indeed. More to come depending on the prompt!
DeleteClever way to get the prompt in - adds to the creepiness of the tale being told. Looking forward to seeing what happens next.
ReplyDeleteThank you. Yes, it was tricky! I am enjoying letting the prompts lead the story ...
DeleteGreat story from a tricky prompt - I loved this and found it quite chilling too. This would make a great basis for a longer story. Polly
ReplyDeleteThank you Polly! The challenge was getting the prompt to fit in naturally. I'm going to continue this story - see where the prompts take me!
DeleteOh my goodness! You need to somehow collate all of these 100 word prompts into a novel! Note to self: do not read those posts before going to sleep... They are spooky!
ReplyDeleteI would like maybe, to write a novel one day, but its a serious undertaking. Didn't mean to spook you out! :o).
DeleteThis is a really creative use of the prompt, weaving it into a different story. You did this seamlessly, and at the same time gave me characters I can care about.
ReplyDeleteThat was a lovely comment. Thank you. Glad you liked it.
DeleteVery creative use of the prompt. Love it.
ReplyDeleteThank you!
DeleteNicely done. I think guilt might be the winner here.
ReplyDeleteThank you. I think so too.
DeleteUnlike others, I didn't find it at all creepy - maybe they were referring to the title. I was pleased to immediately recognise last week's story and even more pleased to learn that she isn't actually a murderer - she just feels like one (poor thing). Excellent inclusion of the prompt - clever, clever, clever. Well done!
ReplyDeleteThank you for such a lovely comment. I am glad you are enjoying it! Made my day.
DeleteWow, so impressed with the extra challenge of continuing from the previous week's prompt. I really liked the way you worked the ball of bones into the story, very creative!
ReplyDeleteThank you very much for your kind comment. I'm trying to continue the story and see where the prompts take me!
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