I can only recall a cushion brushing against my arm as Charlotte's news registered.
David ... Dead? What? How?
I sat motionless. I saw his face. That crooked smile. That hollow gaze.
I fidgeted. I got up. I closed the curtains again. I sat back down.
I waited.
Charlotte appeared. Her eyes puffed. Cheeks crimson.
She crashed next to me.
The red lamp shade cast a ruddy shadow over her face. Ruby tears rolled down her cheeks.
Charlotte slowly turned to face me.
"Chrissy?" She croaked.
"Yeah?"
"It might be my fault."
I'm linking up with JB47's 100 Word Challenge. This week's prompt was ... Ruby
Oh how terrible. I bet it wasn't her fault, though it'll take a lot of therapy to convince her.
ReplyDeleteNow you have given me another angle for the story! :o).
DeleteCome on, don't leave it there...!
ReplyDeleteThis one could run and run .....
DeleteHard hitting piece; well done for getting that in so few words. Well written piece.
ReplyDeleteThank you. It took a few re-edits.
DeleteGreat piece, just a beginning, I hope??
ReplyDeleteYes ... its amazing the world your head creates once you start writing.
DeleteLoads of potential ways forward with this!
ReplyDeleteYes I think so ... I'm enjoying writing it.
DeleteOoh...I want to know what happened! Who was David? How/why did he die?
ReplyDeleteI'm trying to figure it out .... what kind of person was he? This story might have legs!
DeleteSuch a great lead in. Look forward to some more.
ReplyDeleteThank you. I am sure there will be!
DeleteGreat continuation of the last piece, and i love the way you fitted the prompt word in.
ReplyDeleteThank you. Depending on next weeks prompt, there are a few directions I could take this.
DeleteWhat a fantastic piece. But please I need more... x
ReplyDeleteThank you ... more coming ...
DeleteExcellent. I like the way you continued with the same storyline as last week's challenge. I'll watch with interest to see what next weeks prompt word is!
ReplyDeleteThank you. This was either very cunning or very silly .... lets see what next weeks offering is!
DeleteExcellent writing, I especially like the way the last line leaves us hanging
ReplyDeleteThank you .... not sure where to take it from here though.
DeleteI love the ruby tears and the cliffhanger. And the rest of the story. ~Miriam
ReplyDeleteThank you. Lets see what happens next.
DeleteTwo words. LOVE IT!
ReplyDeleteThank you my dear!
DeleteGreat red imagery, especially those ruby tears! I love seeing all of the different takes that these prompts generate.
ReplyDeleteThank you. I do too. There are some great interpretations.
DeleteExcellent writing. And I'm intrigued by how she apparently remembers him when hearing the news - crooked smile, hollow gaze. The two don't usually go together. Why was his gaze hollow? Was this why he died?
ReplyDeleteThank you. I am not sure yet. So far I think he's a charming f**k up ... kind of making it up as I go along.
DeleteWow, really like the shock and restlessness here...followed, of course, by the announcement of guilt at the end. You could definitely take this further.
ReplyDeleteThank you ... Yes, I'm intending to ... it all depends on the prompts which way I take this.
DeleteAh, so a mystery even to you...nice!
DeleteCheers!
ReplyDeleteI'm SO enjoying reading these! Polly
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