I tried not to laugh. Charlotte was handing over a frothy mug of self reproach. But guilt, I decided, wasn't a garment worth dressing in. I'd sunk my toe in David's gaze - that was all.
"Just don't understand. It's so long ago. Anyway, you dumped him remember?"
"Told him to disappear," Charlotte recoiled.
"He was so intense, so controlling."
"Still stung when I saw you both Chrissy."
"Was one time, it freaked me out. I'm sorry."
A weak smile mollified Charlotte's sour expression.
"Past has passed I guess."
"Thanks."
Now I needed a long soak.
David's funeral couldn't come sooner.
I'm linking up with JB47's 100 Word Challenge. This week's prompt was... I tried not to laugh...
This is part of a wider story. You can read the other instalments in the series here.
That's written really well. Off to read the other instalments now!
ReplyDeleteThank you - hope you enjoy them!
DeleteGreat piece; so much is going on between the lines that you can almost feel it bubbling up.
ReplyDeleteThank you. Glad you get an idea of the subtext behind the words!
DeleteAmazing. I would never have guessed that ending. It's very clever.
ReplyDeleteThank you - hoping to get this story wrapped up before the end of the year!
DeleteWhat a story. I have read a few of the installments now, and I love how you can tell a story just by dialogue.
ReplyDeleteThank you - and you are so right - dialogue is so powerful!
DeleteBrilliant, 'a frothy mug of self reproach' great wordsmithing!
ReplyDeleteThank you - I was pleased with that too :o).
DeleteI think it's really clever how you're writing this. Story via all these prompts
ReplyDeleteAnd keeping them so mysterious! Sorry for rubbish iPad typing! X
DeleteThank you - if you hadn't of mentioned it, I wouldn't have known that you were typing on your iPAD! X.
DeleteI love following your story. And you're so good at it x
ReplyDeleteThank you ... and for still following it! X.
DeleteI tried to write one of these challenges a couple of weeks ago - it's not as easy as it looks. You have a real talent for it though, and it must be even harder when you're trying to link a story together week after week.
ReplyDeleteSo, David isn't going to come between them from beyond the grave? Or is there going to be a suprise at the funeral / reading of the will? I need to go back and re-read some of the segments. I keep getting muddled up between Chrissy and Charlotte!
No it's not that easy - everything has to be condensed - but I think it might be easier to write an ongoing story than a stand alone piece - at least with a story you have an idea of what to write. There will be surprises at the funeral!
DeleteVery nicely done. Understated emotions with beautiful imagery and subtext. Oh, what the heck am I saying? I loved it. Isn't that enough? And here I thought I would be the only one dealing with more serious topics with this prompt. Four so far, including mine, deal with death or aging.
ReplyDeleteThank you! And very pleased you enjoyed the imagery and the subtext. It's great what these prompts ignite in the writer!
DeleteThere's a whole story dying to be told here! Nicely done!
ReplyDeleteBeats me how you managed to twist each prompt into a continuing narrative!
ReplyDeleteThank you! I actually think it's a little easier than doing a stand alone piece - at least I have an idea of the story before I start, and then need to find a way of shoe horning the prompt in!
DeleteWhat a fab ending, love it x
ReplyDeleteThank you Susan! X.
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