"I'm doing my best." Stupid car. Stupid me.
The engine had finally coughed into shape after nearly twenty attempts. Now we were late for David's funeral.
"Left turn, Chrissy, left turn."
I took a sharp turn down a slice of solemn suburbia, ahead the crematorium.
Limp coats were already entering the old stone building.
We shuffled in at the rear, Charlotte dressed in polite black, I, an indifferent grey.
On a plinth lay the casket.
Charlotte's hands trembled, her face bloodless.
"I'm gonna throw up Chrissy."
Hand over mouth, she bolted outside.
I'm linking up with JB47's 100 Word Challenge. This week's prompt was... Grey ...
This is part of a wider story. You can read the other instalments in the series here.
That Charlotte is a mess.
ReplyDeleteNearly at the end now.... ;o).
DeleteIt's a strange time of year for me now -- this is getting difficult for me to read for personal reasons. I'm still curious about how it all turns out, though.
ReplyDeleteThank you for your honest comment - I totally understand where you are coming from - I hope to finish this before Xmas - and if you want to, come back to it another time :o).
DeletePs. Sorry to hear this isn't a good time of year for you.
DeleteLove this piece - some great descriptions here. Solemn suburbia and limp coats - fabulous. Now I'm wondering if one of them is pregnant?
ReplyDeleteThank you! This was a fun one to write - nearly at the finish line now!
Delete'Polite black' 'indifferent grey' - good description!
ReplyDeleteThank you very much - glad you liked it!
DeleteWow, you sure do fit a lot in 100 words! I really got a sense of the story. Have to come back for more now!
ReplyDeletexx Jazzy
Thank you! Glad you liked it - read from the beginning if you like :o). X.
DeleteYour story is compelling, Love your imagination, X
ReplyDeleteThank you! X.
Deletegreat fun macabre-humor piece!@
ReplyDeleteRandy
Thank you! :o).
DeleteI love reading your 100 word challenges but I'm always desperate to know MORE! xx
ReplyDeleteThank you ... this story should conclude by the time your bundle of joy arrives! X.
DeleteI'm hoping then that when its finished you put it in one piece because I've missed several weeks and i'd like to read it flowing!
ReplyDeleteThat would be a good thing to do - I've tried to keep the pieces as flowing as possible but it can be quite challenging with only 100 words at my disposal. All the pieces can be found in my 'writing' section - if you fancy a read. :o)
DeleteI never before knew what a plinth was. Nice treatment ... What's going to happen next???
ReplyDeleteHa! ha! wait and see ;o).
DeleteLove the 'indifferent grey'. I'd like to see it in its entirety at the end too!
ReplyDeleteThank you ... and so would I!!! I haven't read the whole thing for ages!
DeleteWhat a fab story, love to read more x
ReplyDeleteThank you X.
DeleteJust catching-up. Can feel that is coming to some kind of conclusion... the story has been intriguing and surprising throughout. You are good at this x
ReplyDeleteThank you! Nearly at the finish line X.
DeleteI, too, am struck by "indifferent grey."
ReplyDeleteIs she unmoved by this death?
JzB
She's ambivalent, certainly.
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