It might be a Spring morning but frost permeated the kitchen, ice dislocating words between allies, and Winter will bring heartache and shattered ties...
"Did I want him?"
"Yes, that's what I asked," Charlotte jabbed.
"No, not like that. I mean he was attractive. But repelled me too. Listen Char," I pleaded, "I would never have gone for him."
"Really?"
"Yes, really. You're my friend."
Heart beats jolted in the hollow of my throat. Then it occurred to me...
"Char, you're deflecting guilt onto me."
Now Charlotte stood rigid, glaciated.
"Why? Why Char?"
I'm linking up with JB47's 100 Word Challenge. This week's prompt was... and Winter will bring...
This is part of a wider story. You can read the other instalments in the series here.
I do like how you flip the thread at the end. Teasing...
ReplyDeleteThank you. Glad you feel teased! :o).
DeleteIntriguing, now I want to know more! I'm always impressed with these 100 word posts and threaten to attempt to do one. One day...
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Go for it. I started doing it on a whim, and it's great fun to do!
DeleteAh, another interesting installment. "... heartache and shattered ties ..." as if she knew what was coming.
ReplyDeleteThank you ... the past always creeps up, eventually!
DeleteThis is a very tangled web between these two girls... can't wait for the next instalment!x
ReplyDeleteI know! I'm hoping to get the story wrapped up quite soon. X.
DeleteJust been catching up on the story. Good stuff.
ReplyDeleteCheers Bibsey :o).
Deletenicely done! and I love that the prompt flowed in so well that I had to go back and see if you'd connected it in. :)
ReplyDeleteThank you, I'm glad you think the prompt nestled in seamlessly, I was worried it might have been a little shoe horned. :o).
DeleteVery good, and as a man I must say... How can women understand each other. Had to read it several times to understand what was really happening here.
ReplyDeleteWomen eh ;o). But I think you make a very valid point, that men and women can communicate differently, and a subtle nuance that needs to be paid attention to in writing, without avoiding stereotype.
DeleteI always forget this is a blogspot and not a wordpress account. So I cannot randomly click 'like'. My point is: I like! Keep going, please ;)
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Thank you - that is very kind -= it's a shame that blogger doesn't have that feature!
Delete'Abused my thoughts' is a very good line.
ReplyDeleteThank you - I like it when you point out the lines you like :o).
DeleteYes, why why why Char?
ReplyDeleteOh you make me laugh! And that made me smile! :o).
DeleteOooh, I wouldn't have wanted to be on the receiving end of that icy exchange. Can't wait to see how this one plays out.
ReplyDeleteHello MP! No, wasn't a very nice grilling - me too, I want to get this story wrapped up! :o).
DeleteI haven't read the backstory, but this one stands on its own.
ReplyDeleteGuilt is such a big subject in our society - I wonder where that comes from. Great piece.
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After oodles of attempts to comment on the blogspot blogs, I have finally given up, and created my own profile. I wonder why Blogger hates Wordpress so much?
Thank you so much :o). Guilt is a heavy bag! I had the same problem when I used Wordpress too - and in the end I created an account, then defected to the other side!
DeleteNicely done, the tensions very real under the surface.
ReplyDeleteThank you. Yes, tense indeed!
DeleteIntriguing. I want to know more of this story.
ReplyDeleteThank you.
DeleteThis is a timely reminder that if we want to write well, as you do, we need to keep on working at it! thanks!
ReplyDeleteThank you, that was very kind - keep writing! :o).
DeleteIntriguing, please continue x
ReplyDeleteThank you Susan! X.
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ReplyDeleteChar is in big trouble! . . . Wounld love to hear how the story unfold
Love the unspoken bits of this; there is much going on behind the words.
ReplyDeleteThank you! Sometimes less really is more!
DeleteSo patienly waiting for your new entries in this story. Haven't seen you around the 100WCGU. Where you at?
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Hello! That's very kind of you to ask! Will be back in two weeks time - not this Monday, the next! Just taking a little break :o).
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